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Ashes raining down
labor pains of earth
birthing only bone
see the seed of hate.

Watch her as she heaves
listen to her scream
do not turn away
see what we have made.
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MartinSilvertant Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Professional General Artist
I would actually like for this to have a rhyme scheme, but what attracts me is that the words still roll off the tongue easily and it all seems to make sense for me together. Powerful poem.
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junete Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
I do agree that this one would have had a certain impact with a rhyme scheme. Thank you for the comment.
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MartinSilvertant Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Professional General Artist
You're welcome.
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh...churning stomach...
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